The indignities of it all! MST review by VGAP I know that a lot of you must be tired of usual disclaimers, but nevertheless I somehow feel obliged to say it...... *DEEP BREATH* This story was not meant for a profit. All the characters belong to respective owners.This was written without anybody's permission, but the author claims no responsibility nor copyright. This can be distributed freely, but it is not to be used outside of nonprofittable entertainment. There, you can all unplug your ears now..... Comments would be appreciated. Criticism will be praised. Ignorance awaits flames. Letter bombs will be returned. If you send me cash, checks, or your credit card number, I will worship you! I can be reached at . Or simply visit my homepage at . Ah, MST review... Always wanted to do one of these neat things. If I DON'T get a good response, I will STILL write it! Hehehe... Since this features characters from several series, some of them are undeniably out of character and may even have a relationship between them. All I can say is visit my Church of Crossover Couples at . Yes, this is a stupid way of advertising it, but hey, I want more people to vote. Enough rambling, let's start the story! MST of “Boy Meets Girls” by Julian Soullard Part 1 of 8 The theatre was dark and empty. Though there were dozens rows of seats, all of them were unfilled. It had a large screen about 50 ft in length and 35 ft in width. Currently, nothing was on it. Few lights illuminated the place, hiding many of its doors in darkness. One of those doors creaked open, stabbing the darkness with a lance of light from hallway. In stepped two figures that fumbled with the area until they found a switch to turn the light on. Bathed with the newly reborn lights, two men strolled downwards to the front row. One of them was about 5'8", with a very odd hairstyle consisting of several thick spikes of blonde hair and a softly glowing blue eyes. He was also carrying a broadsword that redefined the term 'broad'. The other man was a considerably taller, although not much beyond six feet. Like his companion, his hair was a disarray of spiky lumps, although it was somewhat softer and black. He was wearing a mild orange gi with a black undershirt. He was also carrying a barrel of popcorn AND a barrel of soft drink, much to the blond man's disgust. "I suppose you are an alien after all. With an appetite like that, you are hardly a human being." The blond said. "Hey, they taste good." The taller man answered. "Is THAT your only excuse?" "I got a good metav... meti... um... Well, it's not like I don't exercise enough for it! Besides, they were free!" "Yeah, yeah..." Choosing a seat close to the center, the shorter of the two seated himself. "Say, Goku, why are you taking a job like this?" Goku set his barrels of junk food in front of him before taking a seat next to his companion. "Well, we Dragonball characters don't get written in a fanfic often enough, so we take what we can. And I have never done this before, so I decided to give it a shot. What about you, Cloud?" "Basically same reason. Not many people write FF7 fics, and when FF8 comes out next year, we will be completely forgotten. So we are raking in what cash we can." Cloud glared enviously at the Sayajin. "You Anime characters are lucky... People tend to remember you a little longer." His answer to the Soldier's statement was cut off as screams and sounds of something, a LOT of something, hitting the floor came from the hallway. The two men were about to get up and investigate when a female voice, obviously irritated greatly, rang out, "You stupid CLUTZ! Now I'm gonna have to take a shower!" "I said I'm sorry! WAAAAHHHH!!!" Cloud covered his face with his hands. "Oh no... THOSE two..." "Huh?" Goku commented intelligently. A blonde girl with one of the most bizarre hairstyle you'll ever see stepped in, bawling her eyes out. She looked to be about 15, although with the way she was wailing people might mistake her for an intermideate school student. Her ordinary sailor uniform, however, did manage to make her look like a teenager. The person following her was covered in popcorns from head to two, and was wet from a spilled soft drink. She had a red-hair done in a pigtail, and was wearing a Chinese-style red shirt and black pants. Although she was quite short, she did have a figure that most young women would envy. Right now she was bumbling vague apologies to the blonde, who kept sniffling no matter what she said. Goku relaxed; fights and arguments between Ranma Saotome and Usagi Tsukino were ordinary occurences. "Look, all I did was call you a clutz, nothing more!" The gender-challenged martial artist tried to sooth his 'friend'. "I did that plenty of times before, so there's no need to overreact!" It wasn't working. Even as the warrioress of love and justice took a seat next to Goku, she did not face nor speak to Ranma once. Cloud took a look at the other side of the theater, where yet another figure stepped in. Seeing who it was, he started to munch on Goku's pile of popcorn. Things were about to get interesting. "Usagi... Um, Usako... I REALLY am sorry for shouting at you..." Ranma began nervously. "What can I do for you to forgive me?" Usagi finally turned around, with a somber expression on her face. "Close your eyes." As soon as Ranma complied, Usagi's tears mysteriously disappeared and a happy grin formed on her face. Ranma was too easy to manipulate; all it took was a little tears, and he would be obeying her. Puckering her lips, she started to lean forward to her lover's unsuspecting face... When a loud cough interrupted her. “Ahem!” As soon as she heard that voice, Ranma opened her eyes to gaze at someone who could easily pass as her twin, except that the newcomer's face was a little softer than hers and she wore different clothes. Ranma buried her face into her hands. “Damn it, not this again...” Usagi turned around and glared at her rival. "YOU! Hikaru!" The magic knight returned the glare. “Are you so desparate to kiss him as to use crocodile tears?" Cloud took a sip of Coke. Yes, things were getting interesting indeed. Goku appeared confused. "Umm... Aren't they out of the character?" "My friend, both of them are in love with that pig-tailed casanova." Cloud supplied helpfully. "I know that, but they are acting like Ukyo and Shampoo..." The Soldier shrugged. "Anime Rule #1: Jealous females are often unreasonable and violent." Meanwhile, the arguments were growing in intensity. “You have got that magic swordman! Back off!” “YOU accuse me of two-timing?! What about your boyfriend in tuxedo?” "I'm a princess! I can love anyone I want to!" "You are princess alright; a princess of lunacy!" Usagi saw red as the horrible pun snapped what passed for her rationality. "HOW DARE-" The screen came to life at this incredibly convinient time, diffusing a seed of a catastrophe. VGAP's face showed up on the screen, distracting the two girls from their previous argument with its irresistable ugliness. "Ah, good! All of you are here already!" He began to speak. "All right then, let's get started. All of you can make a comment as much as you want, but most of you have a specific tasks assigned on you. "Cloud, you check the spelling and grammar structures. Goku will be analyzing action scenes; such as translating a special attack, or checking power levels of characters. Ranma is responsible for characterization, continuity, etcetra. And Usagi will grade the innovation, presentation, and other general attributes of the fanfic." Hikaru frowned. "What about me?" "You are a guest commenter, so you don't have any specific task." Usagi brightened. "She's a guest commenter? I don't have to put up with her every time?" "Yes and no. Don't be too happy though, I will be drafting her every now and then." Both Hikaru and Usagi looked disappointed. "Now then, do a job worthy as my review team!" Cloud rolled his eyes. "ANY character can do a job worthy of YOU." VGAP seethed, but held back an insulting reprisal, remembering the last time he offended Cloud and got Omnislashed (Read Bishoujo Senshi Sailor Avalanche in my fanfics page.). "The fic will start shortly. And for God's sake, DON'T fight!" Hikaru and Usagi sat beside Ranma, making her all the more nervous. Why can't I have normal girlfriends, she thought as the fic started. >Dragon ball Z/Sailor Moon fanfic > Usagi: That's pretty rare. They differ in tone so much that not many authors like both of them. >"Boy meets girls" Cloud: A lame title. Ranma: You are quick to insult a fanfic, aren't you? > >By Julian Soullard > > > Warning: All characters from this fanfic are copy right from Cloud: Copyrights. And 'from' should be 'of'. > Akira Toriyama (Dragon ball Z) and Takeuchi Naoko > (Sailor Moon) so don't sue me. Also worth noticing, this is my first Cloud: Noting. Goku: Do these disclaimers legally protect writers? Hikaru: Not really, but then chances of getting sued over fanfics are pretty low. >fanfic and english isn't my native language (it's spanish and french), >so if you don't like it keep that in mind. Ranma: If this is his third language, then it's quite good. Cloud: English, Spanish, and French need to be capitalized. > > > > AND NOW ON WITH.... Usagi: Finally! > > Chapter 1: Where am I? > Ranma: Hey, wait a minute... Hikaru: Don't worry, I don't think this is referring to Ryoga. > > The sun was up and a new day had started, Trunks Cloud: It should be a period instead of a comma. >didn't sleep all night, how could he? This was the day for which he > trained so hard the last two years. He got up and got dressed, Ranma: Wait a minute, didn't Trunks start training from his early childhood? > then went towards his bed picking up his sword that laid against >the nearby wall. Hikaru: I always wondered why Trunks uses a sword when none of the other Z warriors does. Ranma: Well, he's the only one with taste in DB. >Heading to the hangar he suddenly stopped and started thinking >of what he was about to do. Could he do it? He had to! Goku was >the only one who could have stopped this madness. Trunks knew Goku: What about Gohan? He's stronger than me. >that he wasn't strong enough, he found out in a very painful way. Cloud: A semicolon would be preferrable, but I suppose it would be okay. >Once he entered the hangar he saw his mother still working on the > time machine, by the way she looked she didn't had much sleep >either. Cloud: A period instead of a comma. > >"You're awake." She said without even turning to see who was >she talking to, still working on the machine. > >"I didn't get much sleep to awake out of anything." Trunks responded Cloud: .......... Goku: Shouldn't you be pointing out that there is supposed to be a period? Cloud: I was being subtle, you idiot. > >"Well," she said while finishing her work "I don't think none of us >could. Cloud: Punctuation needed. And double negative. >Everything is ready, how about you?" Usagi: (Trunks voice) I want breakfast and a kiloliter of coffee! > >"I'm ready as well." > >"Good." she said while pulling out of her pocket a small pillbox " Cloud: Again, punctuation needed. >This is what he needs, although this might seem simple anything >could happen during you trip so be careful." Cloud: Semicolon instead of comma. > >Trunks nodded then boarded the ship only to be held back by >his mother. Cloud: This seems like a run-on sentence. Hikaru: Do you HAVE to pick up all the mistakes? Cloud: That's what I'm supposed to do. > >"Trunks..." she said "I don't want you to end up like your father, >so please be careful." Ranma: (Trunks voice) Don't worry! I don't have a spiky hairstyle, and I'm actually civilized! I even have a fashion sense! Cloud: Punctuation needed. > >"I will, don't worry." he said trying to pull out a fake smile. Goku: Umm... Where do you pull out a smile from? Hoypoy capsules? Cloud: Materia slots. Ranma: Hammerspace. Usagi: Dimensional subpockets. Hikaru: Magical jewels. Cloud: Also, a comma would be nice after 'said'. > >Good-byes were never Trunks's specialty so he boarded the Usagi: *sniff* This is sad... Now they won't see each other for months, maybe even years. >craft trying not to look back at Bulma. A few moments later he >was already traveling through Hyper space in what appeared Cloud: Hyperspace is not two words, and it doesn't need to be capitalized. > to be an endless multicolored tunnel linked to other countless >tunnels. > >[Sure is hot in here.] he though [I wonder if there's something >to drink in this place.] Cloud: 'Thought' misspelled, and either a comma or a period is needed. > >After searching a few seconds inside a small fridge on his left side >(don't ask me why is there a fridge in that time machine, it's just >there!!) All: (in unison) Why is it there? >Trunks pulled out a soda and proceeded to opening it. Unfortunately >(otherwise there would be no fanfic!), while drinking, the time machine Cloud: Yes, really unfortunate for Trunks. He gets to shirk his duty and date Sailor Senshi. >when through a turbulent zone of some sort which cause the soda to Cloud: 'When' should be 'went' and 'cause' needs to be in past tense. >slip from it's owner's hand. As a result, the bottle landed on the >control panel spreading all of it's content. Ranma: You know, this is kind of out of character for Trunks. He wouldn't be so clumsy. Hikaru: Yes. Now if it's a certain Meatball Head... Usagi: HEY! Hikaru: Do you deny it when not fifteen minutes ago you spilled your drinks on Ranma? Goku: Girls, quiet down before you get branded as being OOC. > >"OH NO, what have I done??" he said making huge round eyes and Hikaru: You have started a crossover fic. Usagi: At least the combination is rare. >putting his hands on top of his head "I've got to clean up this mess >before...." Cloud: ......... Goku: Before what? Cloud: Before he gets caught into a fanfic, unable to leave until it's finished. Usagi: I think it's too late already. > >That's as far as he went, suddenly the panel started making funny Cloud: Again, it's a run-on sentence. > (and none less concerning) noises accompanied with some very > unusual light effects (i.e. short circuits). > >"Uh Oh, this doesn't look good." Goku: No kidding. Now I won't get the remedies. > >It looked even worse when Trunks saw that the tunnel in which he >was traveling was changing it's shape in a drastic way, it looked Cloud: I will make my corrections more concise from this point on. ';' instead of ','. >more like something pulled out of someone's guts more than a tunnel. Hikaru: Eww! > >"This definitely DOESN'T look good." Usagi: Well duh, no duh! Cloud: Cut that out. > >And as if that didn't worried him enough, the time machine began Cloud: Double past tense. > shaking as if it was trying to dance something very exotic. Hikaru: It looks like something you would dance, Usagi. Usagi: I'd like to see you do better! Hikaru: Watch then. (Stands up and takes Ranma's hand.) Come on, Ranma. (Ranma's feeble protests die down when Hikaru uses her puppy-dog eyes. They proceed to dance a graceful duet, much to Usagi's aggravation.) Usagi: (seething) How... Dare... That SLUT...!! Ranma: (thinking miserably) I REALLY want a SINGLE relationship with only one woman. > >"Okay, I'll have to take her down for repairs NOW!!" Ranma: Um, Hikaru... Let's just sit down to watch the fanfic, okay? Hikaru: (looking disappointed) If you insist. (They sit down next to Usagi, who is definitely not amused.) Ranma: (sighs and thinks) No good can come out of this. Cloud: (munches on the popcorn and muses) Those idiots amuse me to no end. > >Having no choice, Trunks grabbed what seemed a steering wheel Cloud: 'Like' or 'to be' missing. >and took his ship into the first adjacent tunnel with the only hope >that he would land in a time where he could find the appropriate >tools to repair his ship. Ranma: Normally, that wouldn't be likely. But since this is a fanfic, it WILL be so. > >Meanwhile, in another place (and time): > >"KYAAAAAAAA!!!! I'M LATE FOR SCHOOL!" screamed a young > girl wearing a high school uniform, she was still eating her breakfast Usagi: I'm NOT always late for school! Hikaru: Yes, you are almost always late for school. Usagi: I can't help it if I can't wake up early enough! WAAAAAAGGHHH!! Cloud: Saotome, quiet her down. Ranma: Uh... Right. Look Usagi, well, I'm usually late too! Don't worry about it! Usagi: (stops crying immedeately) Oh Ranma! I knew you cared for me! (Usagi zooms in for a glomp, but Hikaru grabs hold of her ponytail, giving her a face plant on floor instead. Another glares of jealousy are exchanged.) Cloud: Run-on sentence again, not that you'd care. >while running, she had a strange hair do. Her long blond hair was tied Cloud: Run-on sentence and 'hairdo' is one word. >up in two ponytails in a way that the top started in two buns. She was >being followed by a black cat with a crescent moon on it's forehead. Ranma: AAARRRGGHH!! CAT! (Usagi and Hikaru stand up and get in front of her to save her from the visual horror. They attempt this at the same time, and as a result ends up clonking their heads. They fall down unconscious on the floor.) Goku: Finally, some peace and quiet. Cloud: What a pity. Ranma: CAT! CAT! (Cloud holds his broadsword before Ranma's face, obscuring her vision. Ranma calms down.) > >"When are you going to be in time for school Usagi?" the cat declared " Cloud: .......... Goku: When Japan wins World Cup. >This is really getting old." Cloud: Yeah, it's an overused introduction. > >"I know, I know, I know." she said not paying much attention to what >the cat was saying Cloud: ........ > >If Usagi wouldn't be in such a hurry she might of noticed a flashing >light coming from the park she just crossed, that's where Trunks was >now... Cloud: ';' or '.' instead of ','. Also ‘have’ instead of ‘of’. >The cockpit opened letting out a huge cloud of smoke, Trunks came >from out there still coughing. Cloud: Run-on sentence. Ranma: (looking over the blade) Phew! The cat's gone. > >"Man, what a ride." he said getting out of his vehicle. Cloud: ',' would be appropriate. > >He opened his eyes once he was out of the smoke and saw the park >he landed on. Ranma: Watch out for 'No Parking' sign. Cloud: What a dull pun. Ranma: Shut up. > >"Where am I?.....Or more importantly, WHEN am I?" he asked himself Ranma: I always wondered what Trunks's last name is... Could it be Hibiki? >while looking around Cloud: ........ > >There where lots of trees almost everywhere, a lake could be seen Cloud: Run-on sentence. > further away and a boat rental next to it. Fortunately there where no >people around (it was school time) that could have seen him. Trunks > scratched his head in confusion as he saw his new destination, then >he headed back to his ship looking at the mess he just did. (The girls stir.) Goku: *sigh* Well, it was too good to last long. Ranma: Um, Usagi, Hikaru... Are you all right? Usagi: Ohh... That hurt! Hikaru: Ark... You made me look ungraceful, you clutz! Usagi: ME!? You're the one who got in my way, you Sailor Mars wannabe! Cloud: Quiet down, ladies. Fight all you want AFTER the fic's done. (Hikaru and Usagi reluctantly sits back down.) > >[How could I've been so careless?] He though "Stupid, stupid, stupid, Cloud: 'Thought'. Goku: It's not your fault, Trunks. It's all this writer's fault. Ranma: No kidding. The things they force me to do for a fanfic...*shiver* The one inwhich I was the villain was the worst. >stupid, STUPID!" he said out loud while hitting his head against a tree >[I have to hide the time machine before someone shows up.] Cloud: ........ Hikaru: Hey, don’t hurt that innocent tree! > >By pressing on a button the time machine turned into a capsule >making a low explosion. > >"There! Now I have to find out where and when I am. I'll have to find >a place to repair the machine as well without drawing any attention, >but first..." He said pulling out a little black case out of his jacke Cloud: ‘Jacket’. And punctuation needed. >"Let's make an inventory of what I have." > Hikaru: Why? Didn’t you check BEFORE riding time machine? Ranma: Nah, the author just wants to tell the reader what he has. Usagi: This is a rather lame way of describing a situation. Maybe it should have been omitted. >In the black case were around ten capsules just like the one the >time machine had turned into, each one had a number on it, there >was a little index glued inside the case pointing out what each >capsule contained. Cloud: Punctuations needed badly. > >"Okay....I have about 10000 dollars, some food and drinks, a >4 room house with 2 bathrooms, a motorcycle, a mini-jet, and >the rest is mostly useless." (Well what did you expect he had? >His mother IS rich you know!). Ranma: Why would he need a mini-jet? He can FLY for God’s sake. Goku: Yeah, but many people tend to freak out when they see someone flying. Ranma: What about $10,000 then? DB currency is zenny. Cloud: I wonder what rest of the capsules contain... Some ‘momentos’ of Dr. Brief? Hikaru: Let’s hope not. > >Trunks closed the case and put it back inside his jacket, once Cloud: ‘.’ or ‘;’ instead of ‘,’. >he did that he started to levitate with the Bukujutsu technique >so that he could have a better view of the city. Goku: Finally, a job for me. Bu (dance) kuu (air) jutsu (spell/technique) is a technique that basically lifts up person into air by constantly releasing ki. > >[That's odd, this place looks like home but it's different in >so many ways.] > Ranma: Oh yeah!? A Tokyo in Sailor Moon universe looks like the world that’s being terrorized by androids? >As Trunks was flying he could see that the cars circulating the >streets where quite primitive compared to the ones back home, >the buildings where different as well, but most of all he realized Cloud: Yet another run-on sentence. >that *he* was the only thing being airborne, no mini-jets or flying Cloud: ‘.’ or ‘;’ instead of ‘.’. >motorcycles, *he* was the only one flying. > >(As most of you readers might of guessed, seeing a boy flying Cloud: ‘Of’ should be ‘have’. >around in Tokyo with no mechanical equipment DOES look >very unusual. On top of all that, in the Sailor Moon series, >the bad guys are the only ones who can levitate. >You can guess what happened next.) Usagi: Look out! It’s a Dark Kingdom general! > >'Look!' a voice shouted 'There's some guy flying around like >some sort of super hero!' Cloud: Technically, ‘superhero’ should be one word. But then it’s not a formal English. Aaaaaand a punctuation needed again. > >'Somebody call the army!' another voice shouted 'He must be >one of those monsters!' Cloud: .......... Goku: What good did an army ever do in Sailor Moon? Usagi: Yeah, they should be calling ME! > >'Somebody call Sailor Moon!' yet another voice screamed Usagi: Yes! A pedestrian with some sense! Cloud: .......... Hikaru: Sense? Somebody with sense calling you? Usagi: HEY! I’m the savior of the world! Hikaru: So am I. I saved Cephiro twice. You can’t brag about that. Cloud: Yes. Everybody here saved the world. Goku: (with a bit of pride) In my case, not just the earth but the entire universe! Usagi: Grrr..... (notices something) Uh... Ranma? What’s the matter? Ranma: (grumbling) I’m just a normal human. I’m not some biologically enhanced fighter, nor an alien, nor a magical girl... I’m lucky that I don’t have to save the world... I really am... Cloud: (grins nastily) Ohh, poor little martial artist has nothing to brag about! Ranma: SHUT UP!! Hikaru: (sympathetically) Don’t worry Ranma. Just become a magic knight and you can be the savior of the world too! Usagi: No way! Sailor Senshi is the way to go! And I just happen to know a place that sells a nice tuxedo... Ranma: I said, I DON’T want to be a superhero! Let’s just get back to the fic. >'Someone get a camera!' > >"Uh oh, guess I better get out of here." Trunks replied flying full >speed towards the top one of the buildings near by. Cloud: Who is he answering? And ‘,’ would be nice after ‘replied’. > >Mean while, back to Usagi's school, we see Usagi standing at Cloud: ‘Meanwhile’ is one word, and this sentence tense is a violation of prose format. >the hall holding a bucket of water with a sign around her neck >saying "I was late, I fell asleep during class and I didn't do my >homework" she was looking very embarrassed. Cloud: ............ Usagi: ARGH!! Why do fanfic writers ALWAYS humiliate me!? Ranma: Hey, at least they don’t drug you, kill you, lock you in cursed form, or any of the miscellaneous stupid things they do to ME. > >"Late again?" a familiar voice said to her Cloud: ......... > >"Oh hi Mako-chan." Usagi responded "Yeah! I overslept again >and with all the commotion (big tears coming out of her eyes >resembling to the Niagara waterfall) >I FORGOT MY LUNCH...........BWWAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!" Cloud: Woohoo! The sexy Jupiter is here at last! Usagi: And Mr. Soldier here reveals his lecherous nature... > >"Uhm.... Usagi..." Makoto said "You can have some of my lunch >if you want to." Cloud: .......... > >"Really??" she weeped making big puppy dog eyes Cloud: .......... Usagi: Weeped? Maybe ‘squealed’ would be better here. > >"Sure, just stop crying okay?" > >Later that day at lunch time, we see Usagi, Makoto and Ami sitting > next to a tree. Usagi is eating as if tomorrow didn't existed. Makoto >and Ami are looking at Usagi and the way she is practically >throwing food at her face. Cloud: Again, this is a violation of prose format. > >"Usagi, If you keep that up you won't be able to breathe!" Ami said Cloud: .......... Ranma: Nah, I don’t think she can eat THAT fast. > >"Vuat u talk'n a vaot??" Usagi responded with rice all over her face Cloud: ........... Hikaru: (turns to Usagi) For someone who claims to be a princess, you sure don’t eat like one. Usagi: Oh yeah?! Well for someone who’s supposed to be a knight, you... ah... You... Hikaru: Well? Usagi: Ah, ah, I can’t think of anything! WAAAAAGGHH!! Ranma: (winces) Hikaru, can’t you be kind to her like you are to everybody else? Hikaru: I don’t know why you put up with her. (pouting) What does she have that I don’t? (Ranma sweatdrops. Usagi keeps bawling.) Cloud: If you three lovebirds don’t mind, we have got a fic to review. > >"Forget it!" Ranma: I don’t think Ami would snap at her like that... > >Suddenly Luna and Artemis appeared and headed towards the >three girls. Ranma: ARRGH!! CATCATCATCAT!!! (Before the girls can do anything, Cloud calmly bonks Ranma on head and knocks her out.) Usagi and Hikaru: HEY! What did you do that for!? Cloud: He was getting annoying. Goku: But who is going to comment on characterization and other stuff Ranma was supposed to? Cloud: Miss Shidou can do it. Hikaru: (scowls at Cloud) I will get you for this. > >"Girls, we have a situation on our hands." Luna informed "It seems as >if a new enemy is on the move!" Cloud: ......... Goku: Say, which time period is this on Sailor Moon? Usagi: Well, unless the Outer Senshi appear later in the story, I would say during Sailor Moon R. > >"Vuat kain ov henemi?" Usagi asked with food still on her mouth. > >"Hun???" both Artemis and Luna asked Cloud: ......... > >"I think she's asking what kind of enemy are we facing." Ami answered Cloud: .......... >"Well we're not sure." Artemis continued "There were a bunch of people >saying something about a guy flying over Tokyo, and about him being >a monster or something like that." Cloud: ........... Hikaru: Trunks, would you do me a favor and get rid of Sailor Senshi? Usagi: No, kill those stupid Magic Knights! Goku: (to Cloud) What is it with these two? Cloud: I will tell you when the fic’s over. > >"Did you actually saw this monster/guy?" Makoto asked Cloud: ......... Goku: Shoot first, ask questions in their next life. > >"Well not exactly." Luna confirmed "But we have to investigate >just to be sure." Cloud: ......... > >"Minako and Rei have already been told about this." Artemis added >"We'll be meeting at Hikawa temple after school to discus >more about this matter." Cloud: ‘Discuss’ misspelled, and punctuation needed. > > > >At the other side of Tokyo, Trunks was walking >(now that he knew it wouldn't be wise if he flew) >with no particular destination. He found out many things about this >place, they had the same language he had, they used yens instead of Cloud: ‘:’ instead of ‘,’. >dollars, people lived more or less the same way they did on his time. Hikaru: There’s that currency problem Ranma mentioned. I don’t think dollars exist in DB universe. >Everything was almost the same as where he came from, until.... Cloud: Until he wandered into red-light district. Usagi and Hikaru: PERVERT!! (Ranma snaps awake.) Ranma: Wahh! I didn’t do anything, Akane, hones-huh? (sees Cloud getting beaten into a greasy spot by the girls) Oh, not me... Whew. Goku: Um, Ranma? Ranma: Yeah? Goku: What’s a red-light district? Ranma: (sweatdrops) You are 40-something and you don’t know?! Goku: No. Ranma: ... Go look up a dictionary. > >"Hey kid!!!" a voice shouted behind him Cloud: ........ Usagi: Hey, I just beat you up! Cloud: You’re gonna have to do better than that. I get burned, frozen, electrocuted, poisoned, squashed, and all sorts of other unpleasant things just about every day. > >Trunks turned around facing the man that called him. Cloud: ‘,’ recommended. >He was wearing a blue uniform and a gun attached to his belt. >"Yes officer?" he said Cloud: .......... Ranma: (Trunks voice) No, I’m not an alien, I can’t fly, and I certainly can’t destroy the earth without a help of nuclear weapon. I’m not a time-traveler either. So please, don’t arrest me. > >"Can I ask you what are you doing with that." the officer said >pointing to the sword that Trunks was carrying on his back Cloud: Punctuation mistakes again. >"You know, people aren't allowed to carry that sort of toys, it's >illegal!" Cloud: (Trunks voice) Illegal? Why should I give a damn about laws when I can take over the world? Hikaru: Hey, bringers of justice should obey laws. Cloud: By the way, ‘toys’ is a plural noun, so it should be “~they are illegal!” > >"Oh, well you see sir... this isn't really mine... I mean... It is mine >but.... uh... well you see... it's a gift... uh... for a friend who >likes to collect this sort of stuff!" a nervous Trunks said as he was >trying to make an excuse. Ranma: Again, I gotta wonder about Trunks’s characterization. He doesn’t get nervous easily, and he would have taken precaution to hide his sword. > >"You don't say..." stated the officer "And why isn't it wrapped up >as a present?" Cloud: ........... Usagi: So that it’s ready to be used anytime. > >"Well they ran out of wrapping paper, sir!" Trunks was really >starting to worry Cloud: ........... Hikaru: Coming up next, we have the report of a teenage alien hybrid time-traveler who was arrested for possession of illegal material. Ranma: Hold on... This just in! The said time-traveler has escaped from imprisonment and now is flying all over the town! Usagi: Emergency broadcast! The government has declared a martial law! Sailor Senshi has been dispatched to confront the alien! Cloud: Cut it out, kids. It looks like we won’t get to see a Saiyajin in a jail after all. > >"I see!" the officer noticed "I'll let you go this time with only a >warning, but answer me this..." Cloud: See? Ranma: Ohh man! Cloud: Punctuation needed again. Usagi: ‘Noticed’? Did he mean ‘noted’? > >"Yes?" > >"How old are you?" > >"I'm sixteen." he answered getting more nervous by the second. Ranma: Huh? Trunks was seventeen when he made his first appearence in Dragon Ball. > >"Shouldn't you be at school young man?" > >"Well... you see... er... I just moved in from out of town," Trunks >said trying to make another excuse "and... uh... my parents... >er... haven't registered me at school yet!" Cloud: ........... Usagi: Geeze, there’s no way that officer is going to buy all those junk. Hikaru: I must agree, these excuses are pitiful. > >"Okay then." the officer said "You can go now, just try to find >something to hide that sword." (Ranma, Usagi and Hikaru facefault.) Cloud: ........... > >"Yes officer! [Man I can't believe he bought that load of crap] >I'll do that right away!" Cloud: ............ Ranma: YOU are telling us!? Hikaru: This scene is rather unnecesseary and distracts readers from the story, I think. Usagi: Hey! I’m supposed to say stuff like that! (Hikaru chooses to ignore Usagi, much to her chagrin.) > >As the officer left, Trunks thanked his lucky stars he got out of that >one; he didn't like the idea of putting aside his sword but he had no >choice, fortunately he thought of putting it inside a container that Cloud: It should be a new sentence after ‘choice’. >turned into a capsule and that way he could carry it along with him >without attracting any attention. Anyway, now he had to find a deserted >place to start repairing the time machine. Ranma: Like I said, I think Trunks would have been able to think of that beforehand. > > > >Meanwhile, at Hikawa temple: > >"Artemis, have you found anything yet about that possible enemy >you told us this morning?" Minako asked Cloud: ........... > >"Nothing yet!" he answered "Luna and I are still working on it!" Cloud: ........... Usagi: Maybe if Ami can get a connection with galaxy.saiyajin.com... > >"Then what are we supposed to do?" Makoto asked with a boring look on >her face "We're not even sure if there's actually something >out there, maybe it's just people telling stories!" Cloud: ........... > >"I don't think so." Rei claimed "Earlier this morning I had a strange >feeling, I don't know what it was but it felt weird, some energy I >never felt before!" Cloud: ........... > >"Maybe it's not an enemy, maybe you're just going through your >period Rei!" Usagi joked Cloud: PMS, eh? Hikaru: Hey, it’s no laughing matter! Usagi: Yeah! Isn’t that right, Ranma? Ranma: I plead the fifth. Goku: What’s a period? Ranma: Not this again... Cloud: ‘.’ needed there. > >"WHAT??? THIS HAS NOTHING TO DO WITH THAT, BAKA!!!!" >Rei shouted Cloud: .......... > >"GIRLS!" said Luna "That's enough!! The best we can do right now >is stay alert, and for that we'll have to make patrols all over Tokyo. >If there really is a monster we have to be ready when it attacks." > >"Maybe we should split up to cover more ground, if that *thing* >appears we'll have a better chance to locate it, and we can call >for help with our communicators." Ami suggested Cloud: ............ Usagi: Ami is so smart! > >"Good thinking Ami!" Artemis said "While Luna and I keep trying >to find as much as possible from the central command you girls >should start patrolling the area, we'll stay in touch if we find out >something." Cloud: ...!? Oh shit! Goku: What’s wrong? Cloud: I ran out of period marks (Massive facefault.) > > > >At that same time Trunks already found a place to crash in >the outskirts of Tokyo. Usagi: A desolate area in Tokyo? Surreal... >He used capsule N° 6 (the house with 4 rooms and 2 bathrooms) >in a rather desolated area so people wouldn't start wondering >how a house appeared there in one day. Hikaru: With how much housewives like to gossip, it should be found out within a day! Ranma: Well, you can’t expect fanfic writers in another country to get everything right. >Inside the house, Trunks was reading some papers that he took >out of the time machine while he was having something to eat. > >[It's a good thing mom thought about putting these instruction >inside the glove compartment of the ship.] he though Cloud: ‘Thought’ misspelled again, and punctuation needed >[Her instructions are very clear, I think I'll be able to fix the >time machine *if* I find the right parts.] > >On the other side of the table there was a pamphlet that Trunks >got while he was in Tokyo. The pamphlet had big red letters >saying "Tokyo's tourist guide". Trunks took the pamphlet and >started reading it. Hikaru: How did he exchange dollars for a yen without an ID? Goku: Don’t be such nitpickers, girls. > >"So I'm in Tokyo..." he mumbled "Never heard of such a place >in time....which means I'm not only lost in time...but I'm also lost >in another reality!" Cloud: Argh! I need some period marks! Usagi: I wanna know how Trunks got lost in another reality by using a time machine. Even with a malfunction, it seems pretty unlikely. > >After finishing dinner Trunks took the pamphlet looking at it with >a serious expression and then threw it back on the table. > >"Damn!!" he said to himself "What a mess!" (Cloud rips something away from Ranma.) Cloud: Ahhh..... Much better! Ranma: Hey! Give me back my period marks! > > > >End of chapter 1 > Cloud: Finally! I don’t have to correct the grammar anymore. Usagi: Well, it was an interesting beginning at least. The crossover is fairly unique, and there are lots of potentials for later chapters. Unfortunately, the grammar and spelling needs some polishing. Characterization isn’t perfect, but it’s within reasonable range. This is a story that can be considered above average. > > >Author's notes: > >Well? What do you think so far? Usagi: Weren’t you listening to me? >I think I should specify some things in this fanfic, for starters the >lame excuse to get both of these worlds together. I know that for >most of the DBZ fans it must be very disappointing to see Trunks >do such a clumsy thing as spilling soda on the control panel of the >time machine, but nothing better occurred to me, so there it is. Ranma: Well, it can be worse >And another thing, most people think that the Sailor Senshi and >the caracters of DBZ live in the same planet. I for one don't know > EVERYTHING about DBZ but I do know this: IN EARTH THERE >ARE NO HALF-HUMAN HALF-ANIMALS LIVING AS NORMAL >CITIZENS OR SOME WEIRDO WITH 3 EYES OR PEOPLE WITH >TAILS COMING OUT OF THERE BUTT. Therefore I don't think that >Trunks lives in the Earth WE know. Ranma: Good point Besides, it’s a common theory that Dragon Ball is in future since there are some things like hoypoy capsules and hover cars >For those who didn't noticed, when there are words between: > >[ ] that means the character is thinking, most character think >something while saying another >< > are used for sounds and noises >' ' are used when the crowd are saying/shouting something >( ) are use when the author (That's me!) is making a smart ass >remark or notes >" " are used when the characters speaks >* * are used to emphasize what the caracter says Usagi: I think these explanations should have been given in the beginning. > > >See you in Chapter 2... As soon as the fanfic ended, VGAP’s ugly visage showed up again. “Good job, guys. Now take a ten minutes break before the fanfic starts again.” Ranma narrowed her eyes. “Hey, I thought we were going to review only Boy Meets Girls today ” VGAP smiled in a way that principal Kuno would have approved. “Yup, chapter 2 of Boy Meets Girls is coming up shortly.” Usagi gasped. “CHAPTER 2!?” Cloud frowned. “Don’t tell me that we’re going to do the whole 8 chapters...” VGAP grinned further. “Always the fast one, Strife. See you all later!” The screen blinked out before any of the reviewers could protest. Cloud sighed. “When this is over, I will hunt him down and give him a taste of Knights of Round.” “Well, nothing we can do about it for now ” Ranma said without a proper punctuation. “I’m gonna get some hot water and extra supply of periods ” Ranma glared once more at the soldier, who ignored her as usual, before stepping out of the theater. Needless to say, her two beloveds followed her. Goku turned to Cloud. “So will you tell me now why Hikaru and Usagi were acting like that?” “Well, it’s like this...” Continued in part 2 of 8 Tell me what you think: VGAP homepage URL: http://www.fortunecity.com/marina/thunder/181/index.html